Regarding the Bard in the Glen

I love it

Constructive criticism - I love the figure of the bard and the mothers suspicious at first then coming round to him. The description of his clothing is great. So is the figure of the little shaman. Half outcast, half high caste. Interesting.

*constructive* criticism - occasionally it takes a bit of puzzling out to figure out what you mean ( English is not your first language I'm guessing? It wouldn't matter but sometimes it gets in the way of the meaning a bit.


Hope you don't mind!

I loved it, excellent story. Somehow it felt collorfull all the way through.

LOL! English is my first language Which parts are hard to understand? The typing in accents, or my grammar?

I've been told I have a poetic writing style lately, so I've been trying to develop it. Been reading lots of Chaucer and Coleridge >.<

Also, the bard's tale of Caedlain is half based on the celtic story about Cuchulainn and his youthful exploits. Credit where it's due. It took me a long time to figure out what a Hurley bat is! Quite possibly Bjornia will tell the tale again in her own style, at one of the green man story events. Maybe that doesn't leave you guessing anymore who the shaman in the story is, hehe.

-very red face- ooops. -coughs-

I would really like to log on and rp tonight but I'll try to pick out the bits tomorrow?

-tiptoes off -

I love 'cultural painting' stories. Nice

Ooh I loved that! I sucketh at bard-verse-poet stuff *laughs*

Looking very good

Just read this then. Very nicely written Bjornia!