Regarding 'The man who always smiled'

Well... no one posted anything for some strange reason, so I will

I thought the description was the greastest part of the story. Could really picture what was happening; the sights and the smells, and the gore description was really amazing. Enough to make even a true horror fan like me, feel just a little queasy ^.^' The emotion of Alejandro as he rationalised his crime, was spot on, and despite what he did, I do feel sympathise with him.

Though...now I want to read more about this Rallio and the adventures of Alejandro!

Yeah, I hated the Gore, but that means that it was well written (If it hadn't been well written, I wouldn't have hated it LOL!).

Just joking to say that it was a very well written story and I liked reading it!

Although I wouldn't mind a gore-warning before I start *shudders*

Thank you both! I wrote while being horribly tired and grumbly so the gore may have been a bit much. *coughs* Apologies for that, and I'll add a warning to the top post before I continue the tale.

And yeah there's more to tell, I just wasn't sure if the lack of comments meant I'd gone over the top.

I actually found the gore just the right amount for a good impact! But I've been told I'm blood thirsty anyway so *shrugs and grins*

Sorry took so long to comment but I'm useless at these kinds of posts....

Really well written and really descriptive. Your style has a good way of painting a scene in someone's mind...blood and gore and all

I want to see the next bit now hehe

Loved it! Always do what ever ya write

*all gooey flu hug*

Its about time you got the next part up and woot! It was worth waiting for. I liked it better than the first part as I love the idea of the young thief pretending to be a lord and the sadness of Sofia. Perfectly written.

Thanks Tec! I wrote it with a headachey morning head, so wasn't sure how well I did. Thank you for the reassurance! I've been wanting to continue this for a while now and I think I have the next part pretty much lined up in my head also.

Then write it I know you'll do a superb job as always and I want to see how this progresses and pans out. Getting some tantalizing hints coming through....

Tantalizing hints eh? Oh my
I loved it! Descriptions, little character hints, rawr! And yes, totally agree with Tec, can't wait to read part 3. Write it. Write it nao!

*still falling off the edge of her seat* >.<

ooooh I love seeing all these different sections of 'Alejandro's' past and starting to love Rallio too despite... well *keeps shushed* And the orphan's theatre idea! Awesome

Yay!

Orphan theatre best idea ever! It paints such a picture in my head hehe.

But what a place to leave the tale! I neeeed to know what happens next! I'm sure it can't be good hehe. More! More! More!

Thank you so much guys for the comments. I struggled a little bit with the last one, but it's coming along at least.

i loved it too

Wow that was dark!

So well written, really put a shiver down my spine without being gory and over the top. Top quality.

Really tugged at the heart strings too

You are always so kind with your comments, Tec! Thank you!

nice read that was makes me getting ideas for some of my own plot

Gah that was indeed a nice read.

I hope Alejandro burns the torturer AND the Stygian! *raises fist*

Not burn.....

That was chilling. It had just the right mix of descriptions of the different conflicting things going on. A hard balance to get especially when writing about sexual and painful things together. Then the calm and cold killing...perfect!

It's getting more and more dark, but also more and more cold. More!

Urgh, thank you Tec. That bit turned out really difficult to write, and i'm not sure i'm quite happy with it still.

I can imagine it was hard to write. It's a very difficult piece to balance.

If there's one thing I wouldn't be 100% happy with it's the reason she freed his hands from the shackles. It could just be me but it seems a bit....thin. It seems to me that his hands have no place for her in what's happening and the only reason would be a reward which seems a bit silly to me. I could be utterly off the mark there of course and I can suspend my disbelief if needed

Hmm, yes. Her reasons probably weren't clear enough there.

Agreed.

It gave me chills down my spine. Darn it!


Good job there!

nice read made...and cold...very cold....but that is the way we all like it

This was the last bit in the story about how Alejandro became Devan; the man who always smiled. If anyone is interested there might be more to tell of his past, and how his paths lead him to where things are now. That would be an entirely new story though.

Thanks for reading!

i think that last post and the very first post are my favourite! The first one set such a macabre scene, and then the last one is like... "yay justice and laughs!" A really really enjoyable read, thanks for sharing it BUT....
*meeps for more!*